Tuesday, 18 October 2011
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You
Hey everyone, here's a poem I wrote some time ago. I'm thinking about getting back into poetry, so let me know what you think.
You.
Running through the fields of grain
My heart stops to feel the pain.
Waking up from the dream,
I look around to a different scene.
Empty bedroom, there's nothing here.
Just lost thoughts and growing fear.
I try to remember, why did She leave?
Nothin' to do but groan and grieve.
Her heart was mine, but not anymore.
Did Her life with me become a chore?
I thought She was happy, or at least okay,
I'm sorry I never knew what to say.
I just gotta stop thinking for awhile
about all the times that made Her smile.
I'd give anything to have Her back.
I just wish I knew what I lacked.
Because I'm sorry babe, but I love You.
No matter what You ever say or do.
And don't scoff when I say I'm no longer a Jew.
I don't want to go to Heaven if You ain't going too.
No it's not stupid, 'cuz all I ever wanted was... You.
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Oh, I didn't realize you wrote poetry,
I didn't realize you wrote such bloody awful poetryThis shouldn't be on Datingish.
Hm. I think there needs to a be a site for you to share this on. compared to here. Its lovely through. good work. =)
there are bunches of writing circles on xanga.
join someand read good writing.and take criticism.so yeah, boring, predictable, cheesy and one dimensional.Don't listen to the people on here, especially Anonymous. She's the site troll. She originally posted as Fat Shimmers, but lost her password because she can't jog her memory. She instead jogs when the ice cream truck pulls out.
i feel your pain, that feeling is a feeling that is so close to home.
@Chibi_Son_Gokou@xanga - Actually you punk ass bitch that anonymous isn't me. You can even ask the moderators for the IP and it wouldn't even be in the same state. I love how you think you're still the shit even though you were annihilated in your last blog you posted. I don't feel sorry for you that you're single at all. You deserve it. :) I'm not the only one who can sign under anonymous. Everyone can even your pathetic ass and I'm betting that it was actually YOU.
@Shims - Nope, wrong again bed-wetter.
@kyohei_molester_no290877@xanga - Yep, true on all accounts. But back then, poetry was just a fun way to voice my feelings and see if anyone out there felt what I felt. (And the fact that I think I wrote this one in 5 minutes or so) In those days, I wasn't writing to entertain people, I really just wanted to clear my head.
I do have some other stuff that I put a bit more thought and care into. Maybe I'll post some of it in one of your 'writing circles.'
@Chibi_Son_Gokou@xanga - You might wanna watch out who you're calling a fat chick. I remember in a post you said only fat chicks have problem getting dates, you have problem getting dates aka you're a fat chick! I see that you're a self hater. No wonder you're obsessed with fat people! Every time an anonymous shows up I love how obsessed you are with thinking it's me. And you're wrong as well very, very wrong. You have never been right in saying an anonymous is me. You're hypocrisy at it's finest, too.
@Chibi_Son_Gokou@xanga - OH and you're extremely wrong to say the anonymous who said not all men watch sports is me. I'd suggest you get off your high horse in trying to think you're clever in calling me anonymous. I love how you responded to that anonymous saying "for once anonymous is right" as though you knew who it was. No that wasn't me, but then another anonymous replied back saying "to expound upon this idea, blah blah blah" that definitely sounds like you trying to be wannabe sophisticated. At least I'm not as pathetic as you signing in under anonymous then rec'ing your own comment, lol.
I'm going to find a way to report you because I'm incredibly sick of you accusing me of being all the anonymous. It's even more annoying than you insulting me being "fat." If I posted an entire body shot picture of me on here, you'd be made a fool because in reality I'm the furthest thing from fat. My guy always compliments me on my weight so I couldn't care less what you think I "am."
Unlike you, i'm not a loser who sits on datingish trying so hard to act "hot shit" posting lyrics thinking you'll get "cool points" for that, lol. I'm not online often anymore because I have better things to do with my life. I was having a conversation with my mom yesterday about subhumans like you and she told me that I shouldn't give people like you the time of day because you don't deserve my attention. You can think I'm the so called other anons, but I know which anonymous I am, and it's NONE of the ones you pointed out.
@Shims - http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lokcrqUaoz1qafrh6.gif
@Chibi_Son_Gokou@xanga - Your opinion of me doesn't matter. What you say about me is in fact opinion. The funny thing is whether or not you're skinny or fat, no one wants to date YOU either way. Instead of making up lies about how I'm "fat" I'd focus on your own self image. I'm not the one sitting on datingish whining making posts about why I'll be single for the rest of my life. People have given you better tips on how you can attract a woman and you still refuse to change because you're a wannabe arrogant pompous jack ass. The hilarious thing is that you have absolutely nothing to be cocky abut. You have neither looks nor personality and I can see why you behave the way you do. You even admitted it yourself in your pathetic why you will be single blog that you have no personality. I rest my case.
@Shims - Weren't you the one who posted that you had to purge your entire facebook account because everyone hated you? Or how you enjoy eating at buffets? But it doesn't matter because this whole spiel started over you getting butthurt over me complimenting Jenn on one of her articles. Boo hoo.
@Chibi_Son_Gokou@xanga - Didn't click don't care. :)
@Chibi_Son_Gokou@xanga - Hi My name is Chibi_Son_Gokou and I think I'm the shit insulting people with gifs and images.
My response?: childish and lame. I don't even click on anything you link anyway, LOL. This seals the deal that you're still a high schooler. I've never heard of college or grown people still thinking it's cool to insult people with images.
@Randomonymous@xanga - The fact that you posted this on a pretty well populated blog means you must have expected somebody to read it. I mean that is all I do with my blog pretty much, I try and write on it daily to clear my head,
I would be totally interested in reading other stuff you do.
@kyohei_molester_no290877@xanga - Oh I knew a lot of people would read it, but I also knew that not everyone would understand the emotions that come with heartbreak. Not sympathy, but empathy. Not just echoes, but resonance.
I've done a lot of growing and learning since I wrote this. It WAS a little childish, and some of the rhymes were a little forced. But it's what I felt.
@kyohei_molester_no290877@xanga - Holy monkey poodle, you like Firefly? Sorry, I saw it on your profile. I didn't think many people even knew about that show.
@Randomonymous@xanga - Firefly and Serenity... So.... good.....
@Randomonymous@xanga - I learned about Firefly when I found out that Catalina, the rainbow-haired chick from Nickelodeon's Space Cases, played Kaylee.
@Randomonymous@xanga - welcome to the internet :)
@Chibi_Son_Gokou@xanga - lol!
@shims and chibi_son_gokou: i love reading your guyses posts LOL
You're good at poetry. Take it back up. Hope things worked out.*hugs* Thanks for sharing!